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  1. Toffee_Fox on Chapter 3 Sun 11 Jun 2017 09:16PM UTC

    The face of a fox, facing forwards and downwards. It is mainly tawny in color, with both lighter cream and darker brown accents in places. Its eyes are closed. Three wrapped candies circle it against a warm-colored backdrop.

    Hoogh, AO3 did a spectacular job of failing to notify me that you replied to this. GJ AO3. Anyways, it's been long enough now that I can't really remember the typos? I'm sorry.

    One thing I recall bugging me: he vomits up blood in this chapter, right? Depending on where the blood came from, from my understanding, blood in vomit usually looks like black coffee grounds. If his throat was still bleeding, I'm not sure that it would be doing it so much that it would produce such an effect, and have them not notice something was seriously wrong- blood loss makes you dizzy, right? Or so they say, I think... And, I figure that a lot of that blood would have wound up in his stomach, anyway- and that his stomach might well be bleeding, also.

    Note about competent adults: they don't show up very early on in the series, but as the story progresses, they seem to get a lot better at it, with the more time passes. Except for Mouri, bless his soul. They all still have their peculiarities, though (Takagi sometimes comes off as a straight-up doormat, the poor man; and Sato has that ability to drive freakishly fast, freakishly well- where did she even acquire such a skill...? Wouldn't something like that take practice? Actually, come to think of it, a disturbing number of characters seem to possess such a skill: Sato, Agent Camel, Shinichi's own mom...).

    I'm curious as to how Conan's situation is going to end up. Writing about him not going to the Mouris' is fine, I guess, but I don't really want to see him get screwed over in an orphanage, either. Trouble is, they know he's bullshitting; and anything about his life would be hard to prove, given as he shouldn't even exist... I'm also worried about how he is going to function without Agasa's handy tech; he's very much defenseless and virtually useless without it. (Curiously, I'm over 500 files into the manga, and yet I've only seen the skateboard used once; a bit of a non sequitur, I know, but I just thought that was tragic. Does he ever use it again in manga canon at all? I seem to recall reading something about that was the reason why he uses it so much in the anime... Really, though...)

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